[原创]<<Angels & Demons >>PART2全英文~~~语
PART 2%&107 %&107 %&107A puff of free wind ~~~~%&189
She was a pure countryside small girl
He was a sunshine honest little boy
They were neighbours
They always played on a small hill
They grew up together
Everyone thought they would get married to each other in the future
But their guess was wrong
The things came to a different side
Nobody knew why ……
When she left the village
On a dusky red twilight
On that small hill
They made promise to each other
They were sure they would meet again ……
Years later ……
She was back on a dusky red twilight
But everything was changed
Despite they really met again
Their promise were broken
She became a scientist
He became a celebrant
She believed in science
He believed in God
Their point of view were different
The division was growing up
They hated each other
Because she became a member of Illuminati
Because he took a vow of celibacy
The church promulgated an order for the arrest of Illuminati' s member
She knew he would attack herself
But he didn' t
He saw a lot of innocent people were killed
He was kindhearted
He hated deeply
He didn' t want to see any one else would be killed in the future
Especially her
He decided to help her
He released her and took her away
That moment
He betrayed his belief
That moment
She eventually knew his love
The seed of their love was growing up
They loved each other like they used to be
But the church captured them when they ran on that small hill
They thought her was a witch
They decided kill her with fire punishment,
Like coping with other women scientists
When she was bound to the pillar
When they made a fire
The wind blew fiercely
Everybody closed eyes
When it ceased the wind
When they could open their eyes
They found she was disappeared ……
On a dusky red twilight
On that small hill
You could see a cemetery
It said, KODOU RAN&KODOU SHINICHI
They would stay together forever
Nobody could break up them ……
On that small hill
Do you still remember me
A puff of free wind ……Angel and demon……
终于打好了~~~~累饿~~~~~~~~~%&178
%&018 来联盟试试~~~%&018
全文在同人区~~~~~短篇集~~~%&025
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包包同志居然发到联盟来了……为啥不从PART1开始捏？
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首先要说文章很有新意.其次,还是要看上下文才好说.
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哇............嚇我?全英文.....
我是英文白癡,關鍵是我 全部看不懂.....
而且金山繙譯的超爛........
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But their guess was guesses were wrong单复数
The things came to a opposite side
词义选择
They made a promise to each other
定冠词
Years later ……
As time go by
习惯用法
Their promises were broken
单复数
Their points of view were different
单复数
The church promulgated an order for(to) arrest Illuminati' s member
用 TO表方式 arrest是及物动词
She knew he would capture her
词义选择
这里attack的宾语相对于he，不该用反身代词
He saw a lot of innocent people were killed
He saw a lot of innocent people who should not have been killed
这是虚拟语气的用法，用 shold not have done的结构表示“本不该做却做了”的意思
看到这里……有空继续
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蛮有创意的回复: [原创]<<Angels & Demons >>PART2全英
无语……这个鱼子JJ，厉害……
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兰水晶……这个，经过高考后你会变得比我更强的^_^He saw a lot of innocent people who should not have been killed
是不是该用who捏？
同位语从句似乎要写成He saw a lot of innocent people that should not have been killed
考据ing
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在偶的记忆中，应该用who吧～～平时听同学说的时候，就连本地人都颠三倒四的～～
who也可以做同位语的说．．．
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在偶的记忆中，用who应该也行吧～～平时听同学说的时候，就连本地人都颠三倒四的～～
who也可以做同位语的说．．．
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兰水晶……这个，经过高考后你会变得比我更强的^_^He saw a lot of innocent people who should not have been killed
是不是该用who捏？
同位语从句似乎要写成He saw a lot of innocent people that should not have been killed
考据ing
%&191 %&191 鱼子姐姐~~~~~~偶要拜你为师~~%&099
偶的英语老师~~~~那个迂腐饿~~~居然一点语法都不讲~~现在的都是初中老师教的~~~现在的那个居然说高考语法只有10分~~~词汇课文比较重要~~~~~~%&056 %&056 作孽啊~~~
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%&191 %&191 鱼子姐姐~~~~~~偶要拜你为师~~%&099偶的英语老师~~~~那个迂腐饿~~~居然一点语法都不讲~~现在的都是初中老师教的~~~现在的那个居然说高考语法只有10分~~~词汇课文比较重要~~~~~~%&056 %&056 作孽啊~~~
拜师谈不上~尽力而为，而且要不一定是对的~
高考虽说淡化语法现象了，但是学好语法还是很重要的，特别是理解一些原著的时候，没有良好的语法基础，就是全部单词都认识都不知道这个句子是什么意思////
浅草是初中？高中？能够写同人式的英语作文非常不错了哈哈，想来我只会写一些应试作文啊惭愧。
加油咔咔，若是鱼子力不能及，我会试着找些高手来的哈哈
对了，把前面的文一起发出来吧，后面看的云里雾里的~
欢迎
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拜~~~~偶高一~~~前面的好象和这版块么多大关联~~偶等会发上来~~这里果然高手哈多的~~~回复: [原创]<<Angels & Demons >>PART2全英
语法问题请同志们尽量鞭策偶~~~PART1<<Angels & Demons >>
Angles --- from heaven
Demons --- from hell
She was an angel
He was a demon
They met in a beautiful garden, on a dusky red twilight
They changed the places in the troubled times
Then she sank , she was thought being sinister
Then he rised, he was thought being fortunate
They forgot each other. . . . . .
On a dusky red twilight
The rain was falling
The hostilities was opened
They met again, in the same place they met the first time
The garden had ceased to exist ,it was destroyed
They fronted in the battlefield
It reminded they of the past
In the same place they met the first time
They promised to each other they would stay together in future
At that moment
She was crying over the past
He was laughing at himself
At that moment
She laid down the double-edged
He threw the sword
They ran to each other
They hugged each other for the promise
Hostilities between the two sides ceased at midnight
Everyone fell silent
But their love was a taboo
It wasn’t been allowed
On a dusky red twilight
They died together with smiling faces
They didn’t regret
When an angel died
Her soul would still stay in the heaven
When a demon died
His soul would still stay in the hell
But when an angel from hell
Or when a demon from heaven died
Where would then go?
They would become a puff of wind
A puff of free wind flying in the world of mortals
后记：看了DAN BROWN 的新书标题有点感触
她可以是兰，她可以是哀，她可以是和叶
他可以是新一，他可以是平次，他可以是基德
他们是一对相爱的人也好鬼也好神仙也好天使也好魔鬼也好
爱情没有界限，战胜死亡，超越时空，超越鸿蒙… …
On a dusky red twilight, do you still remember me?
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同志们帮忙改语法啊!!!回复: [原创]<<Angels & Demons >>PART2全英
妳真厲害,全英文.......我還是滾吧!
初一學生能看懂啥?滾ing~~~~~~~~~(妳不要介意就好)
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能帮顶就很感谢了~~~~~
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