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本帖最后由 梦在我心 于 2015-7-30 13:26 编辑中考终于算是完了
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码了这么多英文真的是辛苦了
不过我好像没看到这个主题的分类………………能补上吗？ 本帖最后由 风雨之中 于 2015-6-10 20:22 编辑
祝初三学子中考顺利！ 加油！
愿考试顺利！ 语感告诉我这两句话很奇怪
I will reach the first turning point what is in my life.
Before the finally examintion I want to say so much.
要我我会改成：
I will reach the first turning point which is very important in my life.
Before the finally examination I have something to say.
勿喷 本帖最后由 1042247858 于 2015-6-11 09:36 编辑
真羡慕你初中就有这样的英语水平，我那时候英语还狗屁不通呢
要不是后来高中时候（其实也只有高三）每次卷子练习都写作文并且让老师改才有了一定的写作水平
作文被老师不厌其烦地改了N次之后我不知不觉就获得了改英语作文的能力，看到不顺眼的英语脑子里马上改
两年前雅思考试才5.5分，其中写作6分。能力一般，但还是忍不住改了，highlight一下改的地方
全凭直觉，不一定改的最好但至少没有明显错误
With the arrival of the summer, I will reach the first turning point in my life.
I have become a member of the middle school for three years.
Duringthe three years, I have experienced a lot, including happiness, sadness, anger andfear.
I will finish grade 9 in several days.
Before the high school entrance exam, I want to say something, but I don't knowwhat I want to say.
Perhaps I can plaint that time goes so quickly. Perhaps I can plaint that the life of the grade 9 is so busy and boring.
However, everything will end soon, and I will have a long holiday to relax.
Before the high school entrance exam, I can't relax in order to get my ideal marks.
I have said so much, but I don't think they are meaningful.
Here are the key points：
I will hand out my wealth from 09:00:00, June 13, 2015 to 23:59:59, July 1, 2015.Each one will get 6.
Wish all is well in the high school entrance exam. 本帖最后由 Nicolas-C 于 2015-6-11 10:26 编辑
我又回来了，不过这一次是来纠错的
基于楼上的修改情况，个人再提几点吧（个人修改的部分用蓝色表示
With the arrival(暑假还没到呢，用arrival显然不合适；此处应该使用approaching) of the summer, I will reach the first turning point in my life.
I have become a member of the middle school for three years.
Duringthe three years, I have experienced a lot, including happiness, sadness, anger andfear.
I will finish grade 9 in several days.
Before the high school entrance exam, I want to say something, but I don't knowwhat I want to say.
Perhaps I can plaint that time goes so quickly. Perhaps I can plaint that the life of the grade 9 is so busy and boring.
However, everything will end soon, and I will have a long holiday to relax.
Before the high school entrance exam, I can't relax in order to get my ideal marks.
I have said so much, but I don't think they are meaningful.
Here are the key points：
I will hand out my wealth from 09:00:00, June 13, 2015 to 23:59:59, July 1, 2015.Each one will get 6.
Wish all is(这里应该是没有注意到主句的动词用的是wish；为了让语气稍微强烈一点，这里可以改成hope all will be，如果坚持用wish则需写成wish all would be) well in the high school entrance exam.
Dear, 你真的很棒啦，加油加油哈，祝中考成功！ 楼上咋嫩么多纠错滴，表打击小盆友嘛，我就觉得已经很不错啦~~~
没有几天了，考试要加油啊~~~ 祝楼主好运了。挂柯南，挂科一定很难 本帖最后由 夔zzZ 于 2015-6-12 11:10 编辑
我来从行文的角度来改改，偏文法语法概念，请思索后接受。看时间貌似楼主没准可能已经在考试了= =，但是还是希望能留下自己的建议来让楼主有所提高。
批注版（排版乱，流畅版在下面）
With the approaching of summer （summer不需要冠词）, the first turning point is coming, which is very important in my life.（主语变成了 转折点，为了文法多样化；转折点都是非常重要的，故变成非限制性定语从句）
I have been a member of a junior middle school （并未提及具体学校，用不定冠词） for three years.
During these years, I experienced happiness, sadness, angry and fear.（英语不卖关子，不许需要a lot之后再描述；一系列词汇并列中一般最多只用一个and；文法角度上讲，这句是一个引子或伏笔，后面应展开，却未见展开叙述）
Grade 9 will be finished in several days.（主语变成了 初三，为了文法多样化）
I have something to talk about before the final examination,（这个才是毕业考试，不是finally；注意英语和汉语的语言顺序，写作并非翻译，就算是翻译也不要完全直译；say过于口语化，换为talk about）but the logic is not that smooth in my mind.（英语写作中并没有汉语随笔文那样很多无意义的抒情语句，故此更换；有逻辑顺序的两个分句之间不应用句号而应用逗号；又是一个引子，却未见展开）
Prehaps I could（perhaps引出的统称虚拟语气，不用原型） complain about（低级错误，plaint是名词） that（加一个that使后面变成从句，否则goes使得句子出现双谓语） time goes by so quickly（修饰动词goes，用副词）and the life（生活life不可数） of grade 9（grade 9不需要冠词） is so busy and boring.（相同的动词一般不用多句排比，故合并为一句）
Now that（无可转折，不用but；now也过于口语化，但可以接受，也可换成At this moment） everything will come to an end（end不是动词，此处需要动词，故改为常用语句）, and I will be able to have a long holiday to relax.（应该用将来语态，故更改；relax myself这个词组你不懂它的意思最好别用= =，很邪恶）
As a result, in order to get my ideal scores, I should not relax before the final examination.（过于中式的翻译，很不通顺，故语句重组，并与上文有逻辑联系）
下面是删备注流畅版
With the approaching of summer, the first turning point is coming, which is very important in my life.
I have been a member of a junior middle school for three years. During these years, I experienced happiness, sadness, angry and fear.
…………
I have something to talk about before the final examination, but the logic is not that smooth in my mind.
…………
Prehaps I could complain about that time goes by so quickly and the life of grade 9 is so busy and boring.
Now that everything will come to an end, and I will be able to have a long holiday to relax.
As a result, in order to get my ideal scores, I should not relax before the final examintion.
评价：写作与口语不同，说白了需要更文绉绉的表达方式；英语的写作重在每句话都有内容，文章的华丽感在于每一句的饱满而不是无意义的抒情连接；尽量不要用汉语的顺序来说英语，会很不通顺。这篇文章并无太多的实质内容，可扩展许多；另外，尝试将单独的句子按大意组成段落，才可以称为文章。
好久没看到全英文的贴了，现在考完了吗？06.12 中考顺利！中考加油！ 中考的同学加油 默了一下，某衡初中的时候的英语……默一下，其实现在也一样。
但是玩多了国外的游戏，听多了，听力也有所提升，平时放松的时候lz可以玩点国外游戏，或者听听英语频道，或是美剧。
说真的，有时候爱好能促进学习。
中考加油。
PS：麻痹！lz哪里人，中考才90满分！麻痹我当年120满分！(-30-) 虽然又要暴露年龄，但是がんばれ 真羡慕你初中就有这样的英语水平啊 哇塞年纪轻轻就真么棒呀！加油加油喽！ 祝贺楼主的中考胜利结束(-31-) 看来我来晚了，已经圆满结束了
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