第一名~~~吼吼~~~（红包申请中）

兰依楠

我的一位好朋友要参加希望英语比赛，稿子已经写好了，可是还有些小错误，结尾也不是很满意。但是这周日就要比赛了，所以时间很紧张（还要准备一些其他的）

所以请各位英文高手，帮忙看一下这篇稿子，提一些建议和修改，以及该如何收尾。真的非常非常感谢~~~嘿嘿~~（因为我的英语水平……）

下面是稿子：

My colorful youth

Nobody knows what life is like,for we can not see it,nor can we touch it.But i believe my youth is colorful,just like a rainbow.

My youth is red,the color of flame.It stands for passion.As a member of the new generation of 21st  century,my youth is full of dreams.Although the way to my dreams may be rugged.But I'lltry my best toface the variouskinds of challenges.Because I'm young,I'm active.

My youth is blue,the color of water.It is symbol of flexible.As we all know,wate doesn't have a fixed shape,when it comes to a narrow place,it becomes narrow;when it comes to a wide place,it becomes wide.There must be a lot of difficulties in my life,so I will be flexible in order to adapt to different kinds of conditions--just like water.

My youth is also green,the color of lives.It represents hope.No one can live without hope.Do you still remember the May 12 earthquake happened in Sichuan?There were many people covered under the ruins then,but they had a same hope,there is a sound shouting in their hearts--I want to live!

My youth is golden,the color of my childhood.It indicates purity.In my world,there is no cheat dark or unhappiness.Instead,it is full of honesty and joy.

Youth is a wonderful vision of every child,and happy memories of the middle-aged or elderly.

Luckily,I have the youth,so in order to grasp my youth,in order to show true selves on this century stage.Let's go!
That's all.Thank you!

再次感谢~~~~(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……

[ 本帖最后由 兰依楠 于 2009-5-12 17:14 编辑 ]

可奈依

海外联盟真是个学习英语的好地方。。。。。俺来横行了。。。。= =

土匪

天呀，梦寐以求

sherrygranger

真是GXLZ了~

nmare

过来祝贺。。

磬恬哀

恭喜楼主的朋友了啊   唉，像我这样的英文什么时候才能提高啊= =

cheery

恭喜恭喜！要继续加油哦！

糯米甜甜圈

'Nobody knows what life is like,'

EASY:

'Life was like a box of chocolates.'

小雪儿

lz恭喜啊！

闪电之翼

看不懂英文，我英文差

lychy

第一名呀！不错哦！恭喜~

YCdrCN

HB没了~还是要GXLZ~

娜娜小猪

好吧~~大家抢红包的速度真是一流~
虽然没有了还是要恭喜LZ挖

Oh~yes~

恭喜楼主的朋友哈~~

101707ii

继续加油努力的哈~

微笑服务！

GXGX~HB拿来~

stephanie_jan7

GXGX了，撒花~

动感超人

恭喜一下楼主了。

CCMM

来祝贺了恩~

shanpu

好厉害呀 GX了