[原创]<<Angels & Demons >>PART2全英文~~~语

浅草

PART 2%&107 %&107 %&107
A puff of free wind ~~~~%&189
She was a pure countryside small girl

He was a sunshine honest little boy

They were neighbours

They always played on a small hill

They grew up together



Everyone thought they would get married to each other in the future

But their guess was wrong

The things came to a different side

Nobody knew why ……



When she left the village

On a dusky red twilight

On that small hill

They made promise to each other

They were sure they would meet again ……



Years later ……

She was back on a dusky red twilight

But everything was changed

Despite they really met again

Their promise were broken

She became a scientist

He became a celebrant

She believed in science

He believed in God

Their point of view were different

The division was growing up

They hated each other

Because she became a member of Illuminati

Because he took a vow of celibacy



The church promulgated an order for the arrest of Illuminati' s member

She knew he would attack herself

But he didn' t

He saw a lot of innocent people were killed

He was kindhearted

He hated deeply

He didn' t want to see any one else would be killed in the future

Especially her

He decided to help her

He released her and took her away

That moment

He betrayed his belief

That moment

She eventually knew his love

The seed of their love was growing up

They loved each other like they used to be



But the church captured them when they ran on that small hill

They thought her was a witch  

They decided kill her with fire punishment,

Like coping with other women scientists



When she was bound to the pillar

When they made a fire

The wind blew fiercely

Everybody closed eyes



When it ceased the wind

When they could open their eyes

They found she was disappeared ……



On a dusky red twilight

On that small hill

You could see a cemetery

It said, KODOU RAN&KODOU SHINICHI   

They would stay together forever

Nobody could break up them ……



On that small hill

Do you still remember me  

A puff of free wind ……Angel and demon……
终于打好了~~~~累饿~~~~~~~~~%&178
%&018 来联盟试试~~~%&018
全文在同人区~~~~~短篇集~~~%&025

兰水晶

包包同志居然发到联盟来了……
为啥不从PART1开始捏？

cloudyyoung

首先要说文章很有新意.

其次,还是要看上下文才好说.

蓝素云

哇............
嚇我?全英文.....

我是英文白癡,關鍵是我 全部看不懂.....
而且金山繙譯的超爛........

工滕鱼子

But their guess was guesses were wrong
单复数

The things came to a [different] opposite side
词义选择

They made a promise to each other
定冠词

Years later ……
As time go by
习惯用法

Their promises were broken
单复数

Their points of view were different
单复数

The church promulgated an order for(to) [the] arrest [of] Illuminati' s member
用 TO表方式 arrest是及物动词

She knew he would [attack herself]  capture her
词义选择
这里attack的宾语相对于he，不该用反身代词

He saw a lot of innocent people were killed
He saw a lot of innocent people who should not have been killed
这是虚拟语气的用法，用 shold not have done的结构表示“本不该做却做了”的意思

看到这里……有空继续

程漠

蛮有创意的

兰水晶

无语……
这个鱼子JJ，厉害……

工滕鱼子

兰水晶……这个，经过高考后你会变得比我更强的^_^

He saw a lot of innocent people who should not have been killed

是不是该用who捏？
同位语从句似乎要写成He saw a lot of innocent people that should not have been killed
考据ing

mengxi

在偶的记忆中，应该用who吧～～

平时听同学说的时候，就连本地人都颠三倒四的～～

who也可以做同位语的说．．．

mengxi

在偶的记忆中，用who应该也行吧～～

平时听同学说的时候，就连本地人都颠三倒四的～～

who也可以做同位语的说．．．

浅草

[QUOTE=工滕鱼子]兰水晶……这个，经过高考后你会变得比我更强的^_^

He saw a lot of innocent people who should not have been killed

是不是该用who捏？
同位语从句似乎要写成He saw a lot of innocent people that should not have been killed
考据ing[/QUOTE]
%&191 %&191 鱼子姐姐~~~~~~偶要拜你为师~~%&099
偶的英语老师~~~~那个迂腐饿~~~居然一点语法都不讲~~现在的都是初中老师教的~~~现在的那个居然说高考语法只有10分~~~词汇课文比较重要~~~~~~%&056 %&056 作孽啊~~~

工滕鱼子

[QUOTE=浅草]%&191 %&191 鱼子姐姐~~~~~~偶要拜你为师~~%&099
偶的英语老师~~~~那个迂腐饿~~~居然一点语法都不讲~~现在的都是初中老师教的~~~现在的那个居然说高考语法只有10分~~~词汇课文比较重要~~~~~~%&056 %&056 作孽啊~~~[/QUOTE]

拜师谈不上~尽力而为，而且要不一定是对的~

高考虽说淡化语法现象了，但是学好语法还是很重要的，特别是理解一些原著的时候，没有良好的语法基础，就是全部单词都认识都不知道这个句子是什么意思////

浅草是初中？高中？能够写同人式的英语作文非常不错了哈哈，想来我只会写一些应试作文啊惭愧。

加油咔咔，若是鱼子力不能及，我会试着找些高手来的哈哈



对了，把前面的文一起发出来吧，后面看的云里雾里的~

欢迎

浅草

拜~~~~偶高一~~~前面的好象和这版块么多大关联~~偶等会发上来~~这里果然高手哈多的~~~

浅草

语法问题请同志们尽量鞭策偶~~~  
PART1<<Angels & Demons >>
Angles   --- from heaven

Demons   --- from hell



She was an angel

He was a demon



They met in a beautiful garden, on a dusky red twilight

They changed the places in the troubled times



Then she sank , she was thought being sinister

Then he rised, he was thought being fortunate

They forgot each other  . . .   . . .



On a dusky red twilight

The rain was falling

The hostilities was opened

They met again, in the same place they met the first time  

The garden had ceased to exist ,it was destroyed

They fronted in the battlefield



It reminded they of the past

In the same place they met the first time

They promised to each other they would stay together in future



At that moment

She was crying over the past

He was laughing at himself



At that moment

She laid down the double-edged

He threw the sword



They ran to each other

They hugged each other for the promise



Hostilities between the two sides ceased at midnight

Everyone fell silent



But their love was a taboo

It wasn’t been allowed



On a dusky red twilight

They died together with smiling faces

They didn’t regret



When an angel died

Her soul would still stay in the heaven



When a demon died

His soul would still stay in the hell



But when an angel from hell

Or when a demon from heaven died

Where would then go?

They would become a puff of wind

A puff of free wind flying in the world of mortals



后记：看了DAN BROWN 的新书标题有点感触

她可以是兰，她可以是哀，她可以是和叶

他可以是新一，他可以是平次，他可以是基德

他们是一对相爱的人也好鬼也好神仙也好天使也好魔鬼也好

爱情没有界限，战胜死亡，超越时空，超越鸿蒙… …

On a dusky red twilight, do you still remember me?

浅草

同志们帮忙改语法啊!!!

蓝素云

妳真厲害,全英文.......

我還是滾吧!
初一學生能看懂啥?滾ing~~~~~~~~~(妳不要介意就好)

浅草

能帮顶就很感谢了~~~~~